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Draconian Dystopia



Draconian Dystopia
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A long time ago when my memory blossomed dark,
we finally had our own place in a quaint trailer park;
outside summoned me to the yard for play one day,
but I fell and broke my arm in more than one way.

Now, alone I was for hours frozen still on the couch,
with the shallowest of breaths to avoid another ouch;
I had no brother, sister, or mother to hear me scream,
but the pain knocked me out for I was tangled in dream.

There was a black butterfly with an ominous feature,
never before had I laid my eyes upon such a creature;
and it hovered about as if it had something vital to say,
yet I was afraid, so with my good arm, I shooed it away.

Unexpectedly, there was a galloping horse, fully white;
joined thereafter by red, black, and pale--a peculiar sight.
My desire of life and death somehow abruptly vanished,
and aspiration of salvation was instantaneously banished.

Suddenly, a blinding flash…a materialized cypress tree,
with a pair of ravens on a bough staring deep into me;
I didn’t know these omens, nor what was their meaning,
but, off in the distance, I heard an eerie banshee keening.

I stood petrified as if I were hit with the cockatrice gaze;
such a complex tribulation built from my mental maze.
So, as fast as I could, I sprinted across the field of grass;
easily exhausted, I stumbled over a topsy-turvy hourglass.

My heart feverishly pumped as the crow circled me near,
Grim’s tattered cloak emerged to collect more than a tear;
then, off I went with a scowl to pay the ferryman his coin,
for passage of my soul across the river with others to join.

A weight now lifted as I progressed to my eternal slumber;
cessation of childhood agony with nothing left to encumber.
The tranquility of my death unified with the hyacinth flower,
empowered me to be at peace, and never again have to cower.

The serene absence of suffering delivered harmony and silence,
by granting my persistent wish to halt my endured violence;
this journey through the underworld was better than my reality,
for I no longer had to struggle with poor examples of morality.

This utopia rapidly faded as everything began to turn black;
awakened by the front door as my anguish had returned back.
I wailed at the sight of my arm, and to the hospital we went;
the upshot while in a cast was a welcomed pardon of torment.

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Written on May 14, 2026

Submitted by shaun.odell on May 15, 2026

Modified by shaun.odell on May 15, 2026

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Shaun O'Dell is a combat veteran and an emerging poet whose writing confronts childhood trauma and forges psychological endurance. Pulling from a life cultivated from deep tension, his poetry focuses on the complexities of suffering and the value of persistence. His outlook is molded by successful perseverance across both personal and professional realms. He is currently working on a poetry collection and a memoir. more…

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86 Comments
  • susan.brumel
    Exceptional poetry, Shaun. This poem kept me riveted from the first word to the last. I wish no child had to live through such misery. It breaks my heart.
    LikeReply1 day ago
  • Symmetry62
    Man, does this take me back to the 4th grade when I fell from a tree and broke my left arm. What a superb poet you are, Shaun. Exquisite writing here, Sir.
    LikeReply2 days ago
  • vasane53_1
    Really a wonderful piece of poetry. Realigning with the past childhood days, the free verse analyze the deeper feelings of grownups with the childhood narratives still hanging in the subconscious mind. A nice piece worth reading. 
    LikeReply 37 days ago
    • shaun.odell
      Thank you so much for your thoughtful interpretation.

      It means so much knowing my poem touched you in that the experiences of childhood often remain with us long after we've grown, quietly shaping who we become.

      Thank you for taking the time to share your perspective.
       
      LikeReply7 days ago
  • shaun.odell
    As I step back to review, once again, all of the profuse positivity and immense support shown toward my poem, Draconian Dystopia, I must take another moment to reiterate my heartfelt gratitude and deepest appreciation to everyone who has taken the time to read, rate, and comment.

    When I posted this poem, my hope was simply to encourage reflection, but, in such a short span of time, reading comments from 38 different individuals, with 37 of those sharing favorable impressions, has far exceeded my hopes... wow... 97% positive comments! Coupled with an overall rating of 4.9 out of 5 stars from 23 votes (21 five-star, 1 four-star, and 1 three-star), as of today, I am incredibly humbled and inspired.

    This poem was built upon lived moments and difficult memories, making it one of the most emotionally demanding pieces I have written to date. Knowing that so many readers chose to invest a portion of their finite time engaging with it in such an affirmative way is something I will never take for granted.

    Thank you all; your time and your reassuring voices are the greatest gifts you could have given, and I wholeheartedly appreciate each of you for being part of this writing journey!
     
    LikeReply 28 days ago
    • shaun.odell
      **Correction*** 23 votes (22 five-star, and 1 three-star)
      LikeReply7 days ago
  • donka_k
    Rich images and a tale of deep emotional turmoil make this poem almost like a horror movie. It is gripping and masterfully narrated.
    LikeReply 114 days ago
    • shaun.odell
      Thank you so much for choosing to take your time to provide positive feedback! Your kind words are touching and greatly appreciated!
      LikeReply8 days ago
  • ritabrata_chaudhuri
    It conveys emotional pain with sincerity, but its reliance on direct exposition occasionally diminishes its poetic subtlety and leaves little room for reader interpretation. The abrupt transition from the surreal underworld to waking reality feels underdeveloped, reducing the emotional impact of the ending. Greater use of vivid imagery and tighter phrasing would strengthen its artistic and emotional resonance. 
    LikeReply 114 days ago
    • shaun.odell
      Thank you for taking the time to provide feedback; I appreciate critiques that engage with the work, as they can encourage meaningful discussion.

      A few of your observations were interesting because they reflect a different reading than the one I had while writing the piece.

      The imagery throughout the poem was intentionally layered with mythological and symbolic references to accompany the child’s subconscious journey rather than being concentrated at the conclusion; likewise, the abrupt return from the underworld to waking reality was a deliberate reflection of how dreams, particularly vivid or traumatic ones, can end instantaneously upon waking.

      That said, I appreciate that poetry invites different interpretations, and I value you sharing yours.

      Thank you again for taking the time to read the poem and for offering your perspective.
       
      LikeReply 114 days ago
  • Benny11
    Quite interesting narrative and visceral arc you employed here to transport readers into the same realm of momentary death you created. Great work!
    LikeReply 114 days ago
    • shaun.odell
      Thank you so incredibly much for your thoughtful observation.

      I really appreciate the way you described the narrative and its progression, and I am grateful you took the time to share how the journey unfolded from your perspective. 
      LikeReply14 days ago
  • vbotting83
    This is going to reread a lot by me! Brilliant
    LikeReply 118 days ago
    • shaun.odell
      Thank you very much! I am honored that you found enough within the poem to want to revisit it, and I sincerely appreciate your kind words.
      LikeReply14 days ago
  • baby_p
    "Draconian Dystopia" is a dark narrative poem that recounts a child's traumatic experience after suffering a badly broken arm and being left alone in pain. While unconscious, the child enters a dreamlike world filled with powerful symbols of death and the supernatural—a black butterfly, the Four Horsemen, a cypress tree with ravens, a banshee, the Grim Reaper, and the ferryman. These images suggest the child is hovering between life and death.
    The underworld, surprisingly, appears peaceful compared with the suffering and violence of the child's real life. This contrast reveals the depth of the child's emotional pain: death seems preferable to returning to a harsh reality. Eventually, the vision fades, the child awakens, is taken to the hospital, and the cast finally brings relief from physical agony.
    The poem explores several themes:
    Childhood trauma and neglect.
    The psychological effects of intense pain.
    Death as both a frightening and strangely comforting idea.
    The contrast between fantasy and reality.
    Hope through survival, despite suffering.
    The poet uses rich symbolism drawn from mythology and folklore to create a haunting atmosphere. The poem is reflective, emotionally intense, and invites readers to think about how childhood experiences can shape one's understanding of pain, fear, and mortality.
     
    LikeReply 119 days ago
    • shaun.odell
      Thank you sincerely for taking the time to write such a thoughtful and detailed analysis.

      Something I enjoy about sharing my poetry is seeing how readers interpret the work through the lens of their own experiences, and I appreciate the care you took in exploring the symbolism and themes throughout the poem.

      I really appreciate that you allowed the imagery to speak for itself rather than simply describing what happened. As a writer, it is rewarding to know that the journey invited reflection and discussion beyond the words on the page.

      Thank you again for investing your time so generously and for sharing such a meaningful perspective!
       
      LikeReply 114 days ago
  • seanh.26135
    Very whimsical and deep! It almost made me feel like I was in a darker version of Alice in Wonderland.
    LikeReply 324 days ago
    • shaun.odell
      Thank you very much! Comparing it to a darker version of Alice in Wonderland is a compliment I will gladly accept, and I truly appreciate your thoughtful observation.
      LikeReply14 days ago
  • Artaxerxes
    Love this poem, incredibly written!
    LikeReply 61 month ago
    • shaun.odell
      Thank you very much! I am sincerely grateful that you enjoyed the poem, and I appreciate your thoughtful support.
      LikeReply14 days ago
  • S.Zaynab.Kamoonpury
    Fab story and i admire the rhyming. Kudos!
    LikeReply 41 month ago
    • shaun.odell
      Thank you so much! I truly appreciate your kind feedback, and I am delighted you enjoyed both the narrative and the rhyming throughout the poem.
      LikeReply14 days ago
  • arantgillian
    Very eloquently written childhood trauma the line my arm broken in more than one way hit home the abandonment the fear the rejection. Much appreciated.
    LikeReply 81 month ago
    • shaun.odell
      Thank you for sharing such a personal reflection; knowing that particular line touched something meaningful for you is deeply appreciated.
      LikeReply14 days ago
  • kristreeman
    Very imaginative , I love how you dipped into the subconscious. Thanks for the idea and thanks for sharing
    LikeReply 111 month ago
    • shaun.odell
      Thank you! I’m grateful the imaginative nature of the poem connected with you, and I appreciate your kind encouragement.
      LikeReply14 days ago
  • VynshePorter
    Loved the creativity behind this piece !
    LikeReply 11 month ago
    • shaun.odell
      Thank you! I truly appreciate you taking the time to read it and share your kind words.
      LikeReply14 days ago
  • Sajibaktar
    This is an extraordinary piece of writing. The way you seamlessly weave intense physical pain into a dark, mythical journey of the subconscious is breathtaking. The transition from the peaceful surrender in the 'underworld' back to the harsh reality of a hospital bed is deeply impactful. Truly a masterful blend of agony, beauty, and resilience! 
    LikeReply 51 month ago
    • shaun.odell
      Thank you for such a thoughtful interpretation; I truly appreciate you taking the time to recognize the balance between suffering, symbolism, and resilience within the journey.
      LikeReply14 days ago
  • sirldsmith40
    great poem man, very deep I like it.
    LikeReply 31 month ago
    • shaun.odell
      Thank you very much; I am grateful you enjoyed my work!
      LikeReply1 month ago
  • BrokenPoetry
    Absolutely beautiful. Words can’t axplain the depth at which these words hit
    LikeReply 11 month ago
    • shaun.odell
      Thank you so much for the kind words; I sincerely appreciate your time and your support!
      LikeReply 11 month ago
  • susan.brumel
    Emotional and thoughtful. Creatively penned.
    LikeReply 31 month ago
    • shaun.odell
      Thank you so very much for your kind words!

      What I find most interesting about poetry is that emotion and thought rarely travel separately; we often feel something long before we fully understand it, and sometimes writing becomes the process of exploring why those feelings remain with us years later.

      I appreciate you taking the time to read the poem and share your thoughts!
       
      LikeReply 11 month ago
    • susan.brumel
      It’s my pleasure.
      LikeReply 31 month ago
  • ehiiella
    Lovely trauma poetry
    LikeReply 31 month ago
    • shaun.odell
      Thank you very much!

      While the subject matter is certainly rooted in trauma, my hope was to transform those experiences into something more than a recollection of pain alone; through imagery, symbolism, and storytelling, I wanted to create a piece that explored not only suffering, but also reflection, perseverance, and survival.

      I appreciate you taking the time to read and comment!
       
      LikeReply1 month ago
    • Tracystrater3060
      Excellent, thank you for sharing in such an eloquent way. Great Job.
      LikeReply 227 days ago
    • shaun.odell
      Thank you so much!
      LikeReply8 days ago
  • alyssajackson323
    I love the imagery here, and the description prior to the er visit
    LikeReply 31 month ago
    • shaun.odell
      Thank you for taking the time to read the poem and share your observations!
      LikeReply 11 month ago
  • atsvmd
    This poet has real talent. As I read hundred of poems a day, usually, I love poems I can relate too. I see the creativeness and enginuity in crafting works of poems with meaning. I can relate. Im biased though, because I think and feel poems should rhyme, tell a great story, show feelings and emotion in the writing and author behind it. I get a sense of what the author wet through. Thats why I voted this poem at the top of my list, based on my opinions, beliefs and my style of writing. Loved this and the title too is so fitting. A toast to the author! 
    LikeReply 31 month ago
    • shaun.odell
      Thank you very much for such a thoughtful and detailed response!

      What stood out to me most in your comment is that you shared not only your reaction to the poem, but also what you value as a reader and writer; while every person approaches poetry through a different lens, I have always appreciated works that tell a story, evoke emotion, and leave the reader with something to contemplate long after the final line.

      With "Draconian Dystopia," my goal was to weave together personal experience, symbolism, folklore, mythology, etc., into a narrative that felt immersive while still carrying an emotional truth at its core. Knowing that those elements stood out with you is deeply meaningful.

      Thank you again for your vote, your kind words, and the toast!

      I am truly honored that the poem earned a place at the top of your list!
       
      LikeReply 11 month ago
  • Eviey
    I'm in love with the atmosphere, and the words you chose to use. Also the rhymes are great. Thank you for this poem
    LikeReply 42 months ago
    • shaun.odell
      Thank you very much for your thoughtful feedback!

      I am especially grateful that the atmosphere stood out with you, as creating that sense of unease, mystery, and immersion was one of my many goals while writing the poem; every word, image, and rhyme was carefully chosen to help build a world that reflected both the darkness of the experience and the surreal nature of the journey itself.

      Thank you again for taking the time to read the poem and share your kind words!
       
      LikeReply 41 month ago
  • ramorokamoloko741
    Great Poem it is stylish and refrain structural
    LikeReply 32 months ago
  • StarSearcher
    Dark poetic imagery combined with childhood memories. An intense beauty of relaxed and free-flowing language. Death being romanticized, carrying salvation.
    LikeReply 22 months ago
    • shaun.odell
      Thank you sincerely for such a thoughtful reflection on the poem.

      I particularly appreciate your observation regarding the interplay between childhood memories, darker imagery, and the perception of salvation through death, as that tension was woven throughout the narrative.

      One of the underlying questions explored within the poem is how prolonged suffering can alter a person’s perception of peace, escape, and deliverance. While the imagery often ventures into the surreal, mythological, and ominous, the emotional foundation remains rooted in very real experiences and the psychological landscapes they can create.

      I’m especially grateful that you connected with both the symbolism and the flow of the piece.

      Thank you again for taking the time to read and engage so thoughtfully with my work.
       
      LikeReply2 months ago
    • shaun.odell
      Thank you sincerely for such thoughtful feedback!

      I find it particularly interesting that you noted both the darker imagery and the beauty within the language, because one of my goals was to create a contrast between the harshness of the experiences being explored and the almost dreamlike nature of the journey itself.

      Your observation regarding death carrying a sense of salvation touches upon one of the poem’s tensions; rather than presenting death itself as the answer, the poem examines how prolonged suffering can distort a person’s perception of peace, escape, and relief, particularly through the eyes of a child trying to make sense of circumstances far beyond their control.

      I appreciate you taking the time to engage with my poem; comments like yours remind me how differently readers can experience the same journey, and that is one of the things I love most about poetry!
       
      LikeReply 12 months ago
    • StarSearcher
      Thank you for giving me feedback to my feedback. It is an honour to hear from such a great writer. Actually, I could connect to the poem through life experience. I have been experiencing a lot of pain in my life, and the desire for death has accompanied me through most of my life, though taking my own life seemed out of the question as I have strong values. It ended when I really started to live my artistic side and now I'm living through the experience of being born again. However, I still remember what it feels like to be in pain, and I have a strong compassion to those souls who feel the pain, too. It's for them I write my poetry, and of course for the global queer community to which I belong. From an aesthetic point of view I feel attracted to all things Goth; it suits my vibe. I have read "Les fleurs du Mal" de Charles Baudelaire (at least partially), I like Goth music and I enjoy the emotional depth involved. This is also a reason why I could connect to your poem. 
      LikeReply 21 month ago
    • shaun.odell
      Thank you for sharing something so personal and meaningful!

      While I am honored by your kind words regarding my writing, what stood out to me most was your willingness to share part of your own journey. The fact that you have endured profound pain, found refuge through artistic expression, and emerged with a renewed sense of self is a testament to both perseverance and courage.

      I appreciate your observation about connection; although our individual experiences may differ, I believe that is one of poetry's greatest strengths. It allows people from different backgrounds, identities, and walks of life to recognize something familiar in one another's struggles, fears, hopes, and triumphs.

      Most importantly, I am glad to hear that your artistic pursuits have helped transform pain into purpose; I suspect many readers and writers alike benefit from that willingness to create, share, and connect with others through your work.

      Thank you again for your thoughtful response and for sharing your story!
       
      LikeReply 11 month ago
  • WilliamHe
    This poem is a haunting journey through childhood trauma, blending stark realism with surreal, mythological imagery. The broken arm becomes a gateway to a dark dreamscape—black butterflies, pale horses, ravens, and a banshee—all reflecting the child’s isolation and fear. The underworld passage feels like an escape from suffering, yet the return to reality is crushing. The contrast between death’s tranquility and life’s “violence” is powerful, though the poem occasionally leans on abstract phrases (“poor examples of morality”). Still, its visceral moments—the shallow breaths, the shooed butterfly, the hourglass—create a deeply affecting narrative of pain and temporary deliverance. 
    LikeReply 32 months ago
    • shaun.odell
      Thank you sincerely for such an insightful and deeply analytical reflection on the poem.

      What I found most meaningful in your interpretation was your recognition of the tension between perceived peace and lived suffering, because that uncomfortable contrast sits at the heart of the journey.

      While the poem draws heavily from childhood experiences, I never intended it to exist solely as a story about trauma; rather, it explores a question that has followed humanity throughout history: why do some forms of suffering become so normalized that even the darkest alternatives can appear merciful by comparison? The creatures, symbols, and underworld landscape are merely different lenses through which that question is examined.

      I also appreciate your observations regarding the butterfly, the hourglass, the ravens, and the passage itself. For me, symbolism is most effective when readers discover their own meaning within it rather than being handed a definitive answer.

      Thank you again for investing so much thought into both the narrative and the symbolism.

      Reflections such as yours are a reminder that poetry can become something far larger than the words originally placed upon the page.
       
      LikeReply 12 months ago
  • amono.16912
    A powerful and poignant ominous poem. Great poetry with powerful symbolism.
    LikeReply 22 months ago
    • shaun.odell
      Thank you very much for such thoughtful feedback.

      Symbolism was one of the foundational elements of this poem, as I wanted the darker imagery and ominous encounters to represent far more than the creatures or settings themselves.

      At its heart, the poem explores how fear, trauma, morality, suffering, and perseverance can become intertwined within memory and perception; while the narrative follows a surreal and often unsettling path, many of the symbols were intentionally chosen to reflect very human struggles and questions that extend far beyond the events occurring within the poem itself.

      I especially appreciate that you connected with both the symbolism and the emotional weight of the piece.

      Thank you again for taking the time to read and engage so thoughtfully with my work.
       
      LikeReply2 months ago
  • shahasst
    Dark, mysterious, and beautifully written.
    LikeReply 22 months ago
    • shaun.odell
      Thank you very much, I truly appreciate that. One of my goals with “Draconian Dystopia” was to create something that could function on multiple levels simultaneously: a dark narrative on the surface, a symbolic journey beneath it, and a reflection of childhood trauma and endurance at its core.

      Many of the creatures, locations, and encounters throughout the poem serve as metaphors rather than merely folklore, mythology, or fantasy elements. I always enjoy seeing which details catch the attention of readers because no two interpretations seem to be exactly alike.

      Thank you again for taking the time to read and engage with the poem.
       
      LikeReply2 months ago
  • Risingwerdz
    The flow is very good
    LikeReply 12 months ago
    • shaun.odell
      Thank you very much, I truly appreciate that feedback.

      The flow was something I spent a considerable amount of time refining because I wanted the poem to maintain momentum across all ten stanzas while still progressing the narrative and preserving vivid imagery throughout.

      This piece challenged me to be both concise and descriptive, drawing from numerous childhood experiences and symbolic elements to build an immersive journey without losing the reader along the way. I’m glad the flow stood out to you, as that was one of the aspects I worked hardest to achieve.

      Thank you again for taking the time to read and engage with the poem.
       
      LikeReply 12 months ago
  • Artaxerxes
    Nice job
    LikeReply 22 months ago
    • shaun.odell
      Thank you very much, I appreciate that.

      I’m grateful you took the time to read “Draconian Dystopia,” and I’m glad the poem struck you.

      Thank you again for your support and readership.
      LikeReply2 months ago
  • MaggieRamiza
    Amazing Poem!
    LikeReply 22 months ago
    • shaun.odell
      Thank you very much, I truly appreciate that. “Draconian Dystopia” was one of my more immersive and symbolic pieces, blending personal experiences with folklore/mythology and darker themes to explore suffering.

      I’m grateful you took the time to read it, and I’m glad you enjoyed the journey.
       
      LikeReply 12 months ago
  • Sajibaktar
    "Highly creative and beautifully expressed. A lovely read!"
    LikeReply 22 months ago
    • shaun.odell
      Thank you very much for the kind words. I wanted the poem to balance creative and symbolic storytelling with genuine emotional weight, allowing the imagery, folklore/mythology, and dreamlike elements to serve a deeper exploration of childhood trauma, suffering, and perseverance.

      I’m truly grateful that you found it both engaging and meaningful.

      Thank you again for taking the time to read and share your thoughts.
       
      LikeReply2 months ago
  • S.Zaynab.Kamoonpury
    Wow rhymed fantastic, super story loke mod balad. Is it true? Cockatrice and ominous legend stuff. But yeah we heard oels shriek when someone died, sounded like banshees. Kudos!

    Plz also read and comment my newest poem too 
    LikeReply 22 months ago
    • shaun.odell
      Thank you very much for the kind words and thoughtful feedback. The opening portion of the poem is indeed rooted in a real childhood experience, although the dreamlike journey that follows blends personal experiences, symbolism, folklore, and darker allegorical elements to explore themes of suffering, morality, trauma, and the search for peace.

      I’m glad the flow, mythology, and ominous imagery captured your attention. Many of my writing draws from lived experiences that are then expanded through symbolism and reflection, particularly in poems centered on endurance, hardship, forgiveness, and growth.

      I would be happy to read your newest poem as well. I try to support fellow writers whenever time permits, so I will add it to my reading list.

      Thank you again for taking the time to read, comment, and engage with my work.
       
      LikeReply2 months ago
  • debaditya.ghosh2020
    Childhood injuries,falls are something we all have experienced .. This poem goes really deep into it .. Loved it!
    LikeReply 22 months ago
    • shaun.odell
      Thank you very much. I agree that childhood injuries and falls are experiences most people can relate to on some level; I wanted to explore how a seemingly simple injury can become something much deeper when viewed through the lens of a child’s circumstances, fears, and environment.

      While the physical injury serves as the catalyst, the poem is really an exploration of the emotional, psychological, and moral struggles that can accompany childhood trauma and how those experiences can shape our perceptions long afterward.

      I truly appreciate you taking the time to read and engage with my poem.
       
      LikeReply2 months ago
  • oshah
    Wow! A beautifully sad poem. This poem, depicting a child’s death, has so much depth and meaning to it! Keep up the great work!
    LikeReply 12 months ago
    • shaun.odell
      Thank you very much for the thoughtful feedback. One of the interesting aspects of the poem is that it is not intended to depict an actual death, but rather a dream experienced after falling into a slumber from overwhelming physical pain. The dream itself becomes a symbolic journey through fear, suffering, morality, trauma, and the longing for relief from circumstances a child struggles to understand.

      I’m truly glad the depth, emotion, and underlying meaning caught your attention.

      Thank you again for taking the time to read and engage with my poem.
       
      LikeReply2 months ago
  • karlcfolkes
    This poem is imaged by the author in a Dostoevsky-style framework that, as the title seems to suggest, begs us to understand, consider and contemplate the profound psychological moral questions offered by the story through the portrayal on a persons level of childhood trauma, suffering and survival. It implicitly asks tough questions.

    We are being asked implicitly to consider whether — conceivably at some point in the continued development of human world society, grappling ever with the devastating mental and spiritual wounds inflicted over centuries and continuing into the present era — there can ever be any extraordinary ethical opportunity for the human race, on a universal scale (beyond that portrayed on the minuscular scale of a lone child’s experience) to be able to transcend human suffering, greed, hunger, crime and warfare; as presumably is witnessed in this poem at its ending with the child protagonist savoring a “welcomed pardon of torment.”
     
    LikeReply 12 months ago
    • shaun.odell
      Thank you for engaging with the poem with such depth, care, and philosophical seriousness; reflections like yours are profoundly meaningful to writers because they reveal how literature can evolve beyond words on a page (or site) into genuine dialogue about the human experience itself. 
      LikeReply2 months ago
  • dburriskitchen
    I love this poem. It transforms a childhood injury into a darkly mythic meditation on suffering, neglect, and the seductive quiet of death. Through vivid gothic symbolism — ravens, ferrymen, butterflies, and cypress trees — the speaker journeys through a surreal underworld that reflects profound emotional isolation. The poem’s greatest strength lies in its atmosphere: each stanza deepens the dreamlike terror while revealing a child’s yearning for escape from pain and “poor examples of morality.” Though rich with archaic diction and elaborate imagery, the emotional sincerity at the poem’s center keeps it grounded. Ultimately, the work reads like a haunting fusion of personal trauma and folklore, where death itself becomes less frightening than childhood reality. 
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    • shaun.odell
      Thank you sincerely for such a thoughtful and deeply analytical reflection on my poem; I greatly appreciate the level of attention you gave not only to the imagery and symbolism, but to the emotional architecture beneath it as well.

      My intention was to create something that felt psychologically immersive and almost mythological in tone, where childhood trauma, emotional neglect, isolation, and the allure of escape gradually blurred together into a surreal internal landscape; I wanted the imagery to function not merely as aesthetics, but as symbolic extensions of fear, abandonment, morality, suffering, and the quiet emotional exhaustion that can develop within a child exposed to prolonged instability.

      What means the most to me in your interpretation is your recognition that, beneath the darker symbolism and elaborate imagery, the emotional core still remained sincere and human; that delicate balance was incredibly important to me throughout the writing process.

      Thank you again for taking the time to engage with my poem at such depth and for articulating your perspective so thoughtfully!
       
      LikeReply 12 months ago
  • Chris_Camine
    Very impressive- you are quite the artist.
    LikeReply 12 months ago
    • shaun.odell
      Thank you; I genuinely appreciate your kindness!

      I still consider myself early in this journey, but I put a great deal of care, emotional honesty, and intentionality into my writing, so it truly means a lot to know my catches the attention of others.

      Thank you again for taking the time to read and support my poetry!
       
      LikeReply2 months ago
  • RobertSaulier
    I’m very impressed with the quality of all your poems!
    LikeReply 12 months ago
    • shaun.odell
      Thank you so incredibly much; that truly means a great deal to me.

      I have put a tremendous amount of thought, emotion, refinement, and intentionality into my writing; so, hearing that the overall quality of my work left an impression on others is incredibly encouraging.

      I sincerely appreciate you taking the time to read and to comment!
       
      LikeReply2 months ago
  • lepreson85
    Nice work on your poem today it was a very interesting story great job.
    LikeReply 12 months ago
    • shaun.odell
      Thank you so much; I always appreciate your support, comments, ratings and, most importantly, your time.

      I wanted this poem to feel more than simply emotional, but to unfold as a layered story that reflects how trauma, perception, and memory can shape someone over time; this was my first 40-line poem!

      Thank you again for taking the time to read and engage with my work.
       
      LikeReply2 months ago
  • Modumalex
    Captivating and intelligent poem.
    LikeReply 12 months ago
    • shaun.odell
      Thank you very much; I genuinely appreciate that feedback.

      A goal for the poem was to feel captivating through controlled storytelling, emotional realism, and the weight childhood trauma can carry through adulthood.

      Thank you again for taking the time to read and to comment thoughtfully with my work!
       
      LikeReply 12 months ago

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